Jump to content
Sign in to follow this  
TheAtlasWarrior

The Humanity Of Tomorrow

Recommended Posts

        Hello everyone, whether you're a citizen of our Solar Empire, one of our allies, or just someone looking for a good story to read, welcome to the first chapter of my Dual Universe fanfiction about our organization, The Solar Empire, titled "The Humanity Of Tomorrow" where I narrate & tell the tales of this amazing organization, it's allies & the adventures they get themselves into. I started this fanfiction months ago and I have several chapters posted on our DU community portal page, so now I will post the ones I already have posted here on the forums since the ones I posted on the community portal have only been available to the members of our orgs, but so far all my chapters have received positive feedback from everyone, so now I want to see what everyone else thinks, so leave me your thoughts, suggestions, & let me know if I should improve anything. Well, without further introduction here is my first chapter.

 

Note: (this ongoing fanfiction series is not for the lore writing contest, it's simply written for fun, and will be cannon to the story of our organization in DU)

 

“Every ending is really just a new beginning”-Ambassador Serpentine to Peter a week after arrival

 

         It was early in the morning, like 7:20 A.M. the sun was beggining to rise above the sky. The rays of light entered through the windows of the houses of the sleeping residents of Corazun Oro, homeworld of the newly established Solar Empire, it was a beautiful day though it would be filled with much work, but everyone knew it was for the better. The alarm clock in the room of pilot Peter, who was in charge of flying the cargo ship "Serenity" which delivered supplies, resources and food between the home world and the mining worlds, kept guarded by the imperial military. He woke up, feeling for the hologram alarm clock, until he finally found the snooze button. He slowly opened his eyes, realizing it was day, he yawned and stretched then got up. "well, it's morning already? oh well, I guess you forget everything when you're in a deep sleep" as he said that he got up from bed, remembering how it felt like being frozen for 10,000. Even now he couldn't  believe he was still alive, thoughts aside he brushed his teeth, ate breakfast and put on his pilot uniform. He contacted Mr.Starwars through holonet "sir, it's me Peter, I'm on my way to the shipyard to begin daily deliveries" "Good, but first come to the imperial palace, I want to discuss something important with everyone" Peter got a little worried "is everything ok sir?" "yes, I just want to discuss a large deposit of a very important material that could help boost our ship production" "alright sir, I'll be there" with that peter hung up & he went outside, got on his hover bike and made his way to the imperial palace.

 

To be continued...

Hey guys, I just wanted to try this out for fun, leave me your thoughts and suggestions on how to expand the story from there, Mr.StarWars motivated me with his stories so let me know what you guys think and if you want to see more of this story, also, let me know what I should improve. That's all for now guys, talk to you all soon, Peter out.

post-2484-0-73334100-1480978024_thumb.jpg

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

       Hello everyone, whether you're a citizen of our Solar Empire, one of our allies, or just someone looking for a good story to read, welcome to the next chapter of my Dual Universe fanfiction about our organization, The Solar Empire, titled "The Humanity Of Tomorrow" where I narrate & tell the tales of this amazing organization, its allies & the adventures they get themselves into. Today's chapter we  As always leave me your suggestions for the next chapter as well as what should I improve. Without further prologue, here's the next chapter.

Note: I apologize in advance for all the writing that's bunched up, all other chapters after this one are separated into paragraphs for easier reading.

 

             Peter finally arrived at the imperial palace to meet with Mr.Starwars, he parked his speeder bike in the garage, he got off and made his way to the entrance gate, after showing his ID certified pass to the gaurds he was let in, where in the main room Mr.StarWars was waiting for him. "hey, I came as soon as you called, what's today's schedule?" "hey Peter, good to see you're here, follow me, I'll show you the map that you'll need" they both walked to the planning room, and Mr.Starwars displayed a hologram map, showing Corazun Oro and a path leading from there to a recently discovered planet "as you can see, our scout troopers checked out this new world, mining experts did some prospecting and discovered a Titanium steel alloy which we took samples of and tested, turns out, it's great for many things than just building, like conducting electricity, building ships, weapons, buildings and other things" "wow, seems like it would come in handy for the infrastructure of skyscrapers in our cities as well as what you just mentioned" Mr.Starwars nodded "exactly, but the mining department decided to study the geology of the planet further and in the process, they discovered a huge deposit of this mineral right below our outpost which we built on the planet. The mining department begun drilling tunnels around the deposit and extraction of the metal has begun, a refinery is being built by S.E.C.C. at the moment, so for now we will extract and store the metal in underground warehouses until construction is complete, which should be soon, S.E.C.C. said that it will be completed in a few days" "that's great, but for safety I recommend we give military protection to them" "don't worry, it's already taken care of, but after that's done, we will start the next project, building the solar dreadnought here on Corazun, using this alloy, we will make it's hull & armor very durable & strong, hopefully it allows the ship to take many blows, & even possibly absorb some too, but this project will remain secret so pirates don't attack us, I already told all our members" "sounds like pirates will soon think twice about attacking us" "yep, no one messes with the solar empire, but here's where you come in" as he said that, he put various pictures of the mining site and the newly discovered metal "you will pilot the resource ferry 'Serenity'  and deliver the refined metal from Dunus, the planet where we found the metal, to the resource storage warehouses here on Corazun Oro, as I said, for your protection & the protection of the cargo, fighter ships will accompany you through your daily deliveries every day, as well as one battleship" "alright then, sounds simple enough, when do I start?" "today, I'll make sure to give you the coordinates, meanwhile you can go ahead and prepare the ship" "well, I'll make sure to do my best" he saluted Mr.Starwars before leaving and heading to the shipyard.

To be continued... Hey guys! this is the second chapter of my ongoing Dual Universe fanfiction, I hope you guys liked it, sorry if this chapter was mostly dialogue, but next chapter will add a little more action, so as always give me your suggestions & ideas for the following chapters, & let me know what you thought of this chapter, did you like it or was it ok? again, sorry if this was too long, if you all want, I can make the next chapters shorter. Well, that's all for now guys, have a great day & remember to always be happy! :)

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

        Hello everyone, whether you're a citizen of our Solar Empire, one of our allies, or just someone looking for a good story to read, welcome to the next chapter of my Dual Universe fanfiction about our organization, The Solar Empire, titled "The Humanity Of Tomorrow" where I narrate & tell the tales of this amazing organization, its allies & the adventures they get themselves into. As always leave me your suggestions for the next chapter as well as what should I improve. Without further prologue here's the next chapter :)

 

-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------           

           Peter was on his way to the hanger, he didn't expect MrStarWars to give him such an important task so soon, but he was glad to help the solar empire in any way he could, however Dunus was kinda far, it's one of those "top secret" mining worlds, I guess that if you want rare & valuable resources you won't find them on your doorstep. It wasn't too long ago since the star gate route was complete directly linking Corazun to Dunus, that way delivery of the metal would be easier, faster & smoother.

            As he walked into the hanger, he saw the resource ferry he has been flying since he was promoted to Resource Ferry Cargo Pilot, it paid him good money and it was lighter work than being a builder, but still, he enjoyed his first rank & job of builder. Before he was able to get in, Xplosiv came into the hangar. "Hold on, don't leave yet" Peter turned around to see Xplosiv coming in the hanger "oh, hey, you're going on a mission too?" "yes, protecting you & the cargo until it safely gets back here, I'm going to lead a small fighter squadron that will escort the resource ferry" "good, at least I won't need to worry as much, are they ready? I don't want to be late" "yeah, they are" Xplosiv got his radio out "alright guys, taxi the fighters to the cargo hangar" a few seconds later a fighter squadron hovered to the right side of the ferry, ready to receive orders. "Well, nice squadron, thanks" "just doing my job, we're ready when you are" Peter nodded & he got in the cockpit of the resource ferry.

              After leaving the hanger they took off and left Corazun "attention fighter squadron, I will send you the coordinates of the destination in case we get separated so you know where to find me" Peter sent them all the coordinates. After exiting the planet's atmosphere, they went through the Dunus stargate & so began their journey. After half & hour, the ships stopped suddenly, & in front of them was Dunus, a rocky, bare planet. It might seem empty but beneath it's surface was that new material that the solar dreadnought would eventually be built out of. "Alright guys, we're here, prepare to land" all ships began re-entering the atmosphere & after a few minutes finally landed on the landing platform of the Solar Empire Mining Facility 10 J.

              Peter got out of the ship & went to the office, he showed the officer in charge of the operation his authorization from MrStarWars to pick up the cargo, he got approved & the workers on the facility began loading the cargo ship. After they were done Peter once again got in the cockpit & took off, now on their way to the stargate in orbit. "So, Xplosiv, what's this new material that will be used to build the Solar Dreadnought?" "Well, it's some sort of Titanium steel alloy, very strong & durable, it can take many blows, it's also ressistent to rockets/missiles, we just haven't thought of a name yet" "oh, well I hope no one finds-" just before he could finish his sentence, the alarms on the ship started going off & he saw a group of 5 fighters & one small destroyer ship firing at them "uh, Xplosiv" "oh crap, all fighters, defense formation now, destroy all enemy ships, go go go!"

The fighter squadron got in front of the ferry & they began firing at the enemies, destroying half the enemy fighters, the enemy fighters responded by destroying 2 solar fighters "Peter, you have to leave, now" "I can't leave you behind" "don't worry, I'll be fine, we'll cover you, just deliver the cargo, I'll alert the mining facility!" Peter, at first hesitant, decided that it was best to do his job, he trusted Xplosiv, he always knew what he was doing, so he went through the stargate, hoping the squadron would succeed.

To be continued... one more thing guys, sorry it was a bit long this time, next chapter will continue in this battle and there will be more action than dialogue, I hope this chapter wasn't boring to you guys, see ya guys next time, Peter signing out.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

        Hello everyone, whether you're a citizen of our Solar Empire, one of our allies, or just someone looking for a good story to read, welcome to the next chapter of my Dual Universe fanfiction about our organization, The Solar Empire, titled "The Humanity Of Tomorrow" where I narrate & tell the tales of this amazing organization, its allies & the adventures they get themselves into. As always leave me your suggestions for the next chapter as well as what should I improve. Without further prologue, here's the next chapter.

 

 

"Good friends are like stars, you don't always see them but you know they're always there"

        

          The cargo ship serenity quickly came out through the Corazun stargate. Peter flew to the port hangar at the capital city and landed the ship, quickly contacting MrStarWars through hologram. "this is resource ferry pilot Peter Atlas MrStarWars, do you copy?" "copy that, what's going on?" a holographic image of MrStarWars appeared before Peter, great worry could be seen in his eyes, he had no idea who attacked them, he didn't know if Xplosiv had made it, if the workers at Dunus are safe.

             "My resource ferry got ambushed by a squadron of unknown enemy fighters, Xplosiv and his squadron covered me and he told me to leave, saying that the cargo is too precious to fall into enemy hands, we have no idea who they are or what faction they belong to, we don't even know if they know what the cargo is, what I do know is that Xplosiv needs help now" "good job on informing me Peter, a destroyer will be enough to take care of the situation, I'll send one there now, meanwhile unload the cargo & deliver it to the I.C.E. hangar"

              "Yes sir" Peter, stll concerned about Xplosiv, had a feeling that he would be fine. He then proceeded to unload the Oncarbium and deliver it to the dreadnought hangar which is highly secured and monitered by the elite solar guard. Meanwhile, as the battle occurred in orbit of Dunus, the mining facility below was on lockdown, after all, it was just a small squadron of fighters, so if they remained hidden they would just think it was another empty, barren world.

               However, as Xplosiv and their squadron was winning, the pirates had enough. "Ugh! enough with this fooling around, capture them and bring them to me, I have a plan that could earn me a lot of money. The Solar Empire won't let one of their own be held hostage by some pirates, now will they" as he said this, the pirate fighters that were left, each shot a blue ball of E.M.P. energy at the squadron, completely frying their energy systems shutting the fighters down.

                Later, a pirate destroyer came out from the stargate and approached the fighters. Using tractor beams, Xplosiv & his crew were pulled into the hangar of the ship, and were cuffed by the attackers and transported to the pirate's home world.

 

To be continued.... As always guys, leave me your comments, suggestions & ideas in the comment section below. Also what do you guys think of me adding a quote between the prologue and the first paragraph? do you guy like it or not? this is all for now, stay safe & have fun everyone, may the force be with you all, always.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Not to be rude... but the way you are posting these is a little spamy. Why not just make one topic and have that include all of the chapters? That way people don't have to search for them, and so it won't fill up the newest topic section.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Reading your story is a bit...hard. There is no real flow, sentences are short and suddenly change course.

 

I like lore/stories of all kind but reading stories which will (or won't) happen eventually in the future is just not what I enjoy. If that would be a war report of actual in-game stuff it would rock as hell. Without that it's just....meh....to me.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Hi TheAtlasWarrior,

 

Your four topics have been merged into one.

Even if your fan fiction isn't for the Novawrimo contest, it is expected to keep one topic for each fan fiction to avoid a spam effect.

If everyone was making several topics for their fan fiction, it would become quickly very messy.

Of course, if someone write several fan fictions, the author can have one topic for each fan fiction.

 

Best regards,

Nyzaltar.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Hi TheAtlasWarrior,

 

Your four topics have been merged into one.

Even if your fan fiction isn't for the Novawrimo contest, it is expected to keep one topic for each fan fiction to avoid a spam effect.

If everyone was making several topics for their fan fiction, it would become quickly very messy.

Of course, if someone write several fan fictions, the author can have one topic for each fan fiction.

 

Best regards,

Nyzaltar.

I understand, I just didn't know how to merge them into one, how do I post multiple chapters for one topic?

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Reading your story is a bit...hard. There is no real flow, sentences are short and suddenly change course.

 

I like lore/stories of all kind but reading stories which will (or won't) happen eventually in the future is just not what I enjoy. If that would be a war report of actual in-game stuff it would rock as hell. Without that it's just....meh....to me.

the game hasn't even come out yet, how do you expect "war reports" I will continue to add action to each chapter so it won't be boring, but no one can give "war reports" on a game that still hasn't come out yet.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Not to be rude... but the way you are posting these is a little spamy. Why not just make one topic and have that include all of the chapters? That way people don't have to search for them, and so it won't fill up the newest topic section.

the problem has been fixed.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

the game hasn't even come out yet, how do you expect "war reports" I will continue to add action to each chapter so it won't be boring, but no one can give "war reports" on a game that still hasn't come out yet.

That's why I said: IF.

You asked for opinions and mine is just that simple: I can't really enjoy stories about something which aims at playing in the future when the game hits and will most likely not happen as this story suggest.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Join the conversation

You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.
Note: Your post will require moderator approval before it will be visible.

Guest
Reply to this topic...

×   Pasted as rich text.   Paste as plain text instead

  Only 75 emoji are allowed.

×   Your link has been automatically embedded.   Display as a link instead

×   Your previous content has been restored.   Clear editor

×   You cannot paste images directly. Upload or insert images from URL.

Loading...
Sign in to follow this  

×
×
  • Create New...